Tone, Conciseness, Bias Quiz

For each of the questions below, revise the sentence to improve tone or conciseness or to remove biased language.

1.In my opinion, Bloom's race for the governorship is a futile exercise. (revise for academic tone and conciseness)

2.It is pretty important for being a successful designer to have technical knowledge and at one and the same moment an eye for color and balance. (revise for tone and conciseness)

3.The nurse announced that there had been a negative patient-care outcome due to a therapeutic misadventure on the part of the surgeon. (revise for conciseness)

4.The graduation speaker really blew it. He shot his mouth off and trashed us for being lazy and pampered. (revise for tone)

5.The customer-centric approach of the company will necessitate that user testing periods trend upward. (revise for tone - get rid of jargon)

6.Every applicant wants to know how much he will make. (revise for bias)

7.If man doesn't stop polluting his environment, mankind will perish. (revise for bias)

8.An elementary school teacher should understand the concept of nurturing if she intends to be successful. (revise for bias)

9.All executives' wives are invited to the picnic. (revise for bias)

10.The number and types of events have grown and increased over time and in recent years. (revise for conciseness)