Complete the Writing Improvement Activity. Click here M2 Writing Improvement Exercises.docxOpen this document with ReadSpeaker docReaderActions for the file. Submit the following questions/answers in the correct dropbox. Assignments submitted in the incorrect dropbox will not be graded. Complete the file and save it with your last name and file name. For example, if I were completing this assignment, it would be named BrownM2WIA. Writing Improvement Exercises Module Two Your Task. Revise the following sentences to emphasize the perspective of the audience and the "you" view. 1. Because we have automated our mobile work trip forms, we need all employees to use the SmartTrip travel reimbursement mobile app. This is the fastest way to be reimbursed. Revision: 2. We are issuing all our customers new chip-enabled credit cards to replace expired or lost cards and prevent increasingly costly payouts we have suffered from cyberfraud. Revision: 3. To minimize the cost of having our coaches set up your team training sessions in our limited office space, we suggest conducting customized team training for your employees right in your own building. Revision: Your Task. Revise the following to make the tone conversational yet professional. 4. BTW, Madison blew a gasket when the manager accused the whole department of ripping off pricey office supplies. Revision: 5. As per your recent request, the undersigned is happy to inform you that we are sending you forthwith the procedure manuals you requested. Revision: 6. R head honcho wz like totally raggety kuz I wz sick n stuff n mist the team meet. Geez! Revision: 7. The undersigned respectfully reminds affected individuals that employees desirous of changing their health plans must do so before December 31. Revision: Your Task. Revise the following statements to make them more positive and courteous. 8. Your message of June 1 claims that the blade in your food processor malfunctioned. Although you apparently failed to read the operator's manual, we are sending you a replacement blade PLUS another manual. Next time read page 18 carefully so that you will know how to attach this blade. Revision: 9. Customers are ineligible for the 25 percent discount if they fail to provide the discount code at the time of purchase. Revision: Your Task. Revise the following sentences to reduce bias (e.g., gender, racial, ethnic, age, and disability). 10. The conference in Honolulu offers special side trips for the wives of executives. Revision: 11. Douglas Luna is crippled with arthritis, but his crippling rarely interferes with his work. Revision: 12. Recently elected to the city council are a lady lawyer, an Indian CPA, and two businessmen. Revision: Your Task. Revise the following sentences to use plain language and familiar words. 13. To expedite ratification of the agreement, we beseech you to vote in the affirmative. Revision: 14. Although the remuneration for the position of social media consultant seems low, it is commensurate with other pay packages for similar positions. Revision: Your Task. Business writing is more forceful when it uses active-voice verbs. Revise the following sentences so that the verbs are in active voice. Put the emphasis on the doer of each action. Add subjects if necessary. 15 Tracking devices are being installed by many companies to gather real-time information on how employees interact. Revision: 16. Reliable data about how workers do their jobs are difficult to collect. Revision: 17. Concern was expressed by some workers about the difference between Big Data and Big Brother. Revision: Your Task. When indirectness or tact is required, use passive-voice verbs. Revise the following sentences so that they are in the passive voice. 18. We discovered the error too late to correct the annual report. Revision: 19. We issue refunds only for the amount of the purchase; we are unable to include shipping and handling charges. Revision: Your Task. Revise the following sentences so that their parts are balanced. 20. (Hint: Match verbs.) Critics complain that young people today are obsessed with playing video games, taking selfies, and they are constantly checking their social media pages. Revision: 21. (Hint: Match adjectives.) To be hired, an applicant must be reliable, creative, and show enthusiasm. Revision: 22. (Hint: Match verb phrases.) Job seekers use the Internet to find job opportunities, market themselves to companies, showcase their skills, and they hope to be able to land that dream job. Revision: Your Task. Revise the following sentences to avoid dangling and misplaced modifiers. 23. Susan made a presentation about workplace drug problems in our boardroom. Revision: 24. While interviewing applicants, questions are often asked by recruiters about qualifications. Revision: Your Task. In a memo to the college president, the athletic director argues for a new stadium scoreboard. One paragraph will describe the old scoreboard and why it needs to be replaced. Study the following list of ideas for that paragraph. a. The old scoreboard is a tired warhorse that was originally constructed in the 1970s. b. It is now hard to find replacement parts when something breaks. c. The old scoreboard is not energy efficient. d. Coca-Cola has offered to buy a new sports scoreboard in return for exclusive rights to sell soft drinks on campus. e. The old scoreboard should be replaced for many reasons. f. It shows only scores for football games. g. When we have soccer games or track meets, we are without a functioning scoreboard. 25. Which sentence should be the topic sentence? ______ 26. Which sentence(s) should be developed in a separate paragraph? ______ 27. Which sentences should become support sentences? ______ Your Task. Revise the following sentences to eliminate wordy phrases. 28. We cannot complete the report at this point in time due to the fact that we encountered difficulties in our research and lost a collaborator to serious illness. Revision: 29. In the normal course of events, we would probably buy a larger building; however, in view of the fact that the economic outlook has dimmed, we cannot. Revision: Your Task. Revise the following to eliminate long lead-ins. 30. We are sending this message to notify all staff that anyone who wants to work from home may apply immediately. Revision: 31. This is to let all our staff members know that hackers exploit weak employee passwords to enter IT systems. Revision: Your Task. Revise the following sentences to avoid redundancies. 32. The IT manager repeated again and again that we must use strong passwords and change them frequently. Revision: 33. Although the two reports look exactly identical, we need to proofread each and every page. Revision: Your Task. Revise the following sentences to avoid confusing jargon, slang, clichs, and wordiness. 34. To pull ourselves up by our bootstraps from this recession, we must think outside the box. Revision: 35. Although we made a bundle whenever our response was quick as a flash, we can't keep shooting from the hip. Revision: