11b. In the following sentences, unnecessary nominalization obscures the real verb. Revise the sentences to focus on the real verb."

• "Evaluation of the gumming tendency of the four tire types will be accomplished by comparing the amount of rubber that can be scraped from the tires."

12b. Revise the following sentences to eliminate nonparallelism."

• "In the box, we should include a copy of the documentation, the cables, and the docking station."

14b. Revise the following sentences to eliminate the misplaced modifiers."

• "The computer provides a printout for the Director that shows the likely effects of the action."

15b. Revise the following sentences to eliminate the dangling modifiers."

• "To examine the chemical homogeneity of the plaque sample, one plaque was cut into nine sections."

16b. Revise the following informal sentences to make them moderately formal."

• "If the University of Arizona cant figure out where to dump its low-level radioactive waste, Uncle Sam could pull the plug on millions of dollars of research grants."

19b. Revise the following sentences to remove unnecessary jargon."

• "The mission-critical data on the directory will be migrated to a new server on Tuesday."