+ +2+3+.. 4.5. 6.12 Document for Analysis - Poorly Written Response Letter, p. 141 Your task. Study the following message. In teams or in class discussion, fist five specific weaknesses. If your instructor directs, revise to remedy flabby expressions, long lead-ins, there is/are fillers, trite business expressions, clichs, slang, buried verbs, lack of parallelism, and general wordiness. Look for ways to improve readability with bulleted or numbered points Current date Mr. Anthony Bursage Lakeview Systems, Inc 4122 Lakeview Drive Ajax, ON LIS 7L8 Dear Mr. Bursage We have received your request for information. As per your request flappy expressions the undered is transmitting to you the attached documents with regard to the improve of security in your business. To ensure the improvement of your after-bours security, you should initially make a decision with regard to castly what you contemplate must have protection You at, in all probability apprehensive not only about your electronic equipment and parapbamalia but also about your company records, information, and data Because of the fact that we feel you will want to obtain protection for both your equipment and data, we will make sugestions for taking a number of judicious steps to inhibit crune Fustand foremost, we make a recommendation that you install dagensis lightsA consultant for lighting currently on our staff can design both outside and inside lights, which bring me to my second point. E dabet security and because of the fact that Bonprofessional there are 33 deferred by posted signs on wwdows and door As my last and final recommendation, you should install space alarms, which are costat lock down over the areas that are to recent protection and act bells or additional light thang off intruderi Autoading the meal that thed, please call to actual disc Tegarding protection of your