$7\mathrm{.}2$ Radical Rewrite: Bad News to Employees$-$Software Is Strictly Business

Anna He Wong must refuse the request of some staff engineers. They want access keys for home use of the latest version of Adobe Creative Cloud, a licensed cloud$-$based suite of apps and services that includes Photoshop, Illustrator, and InDesign. Although priced for small businesses, starting at $$29\mathrm{.}99$ per month per user, the cost for licenses adds up$.$ The company cannot finance Creative Cloud licenses for home use.

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To: Staff computer users

From: Anna He Wong

ahwong@csb$.$com

Subject: Adobe Creative Cloud Access Codes Are Expensive!

Unfortunately, I cannot buy extra licenses for the latest Adobe Creative Cloud apps and services for home use. Or for any other use. Some staffers have asked for this privilege. Which is cost prohibitive.

This cloud$-$based suite of applications has many outstanding features, and I would be happy to demonstrate some of it to anyone who drops by the Document Production Department. Purchasing access to this software for private use would be too expensive. Like many cloud$-$based software titles, Adobe Creative Cloud is subscription based, per month, per user. We cannot use access keys for more than one computer each. The access keys are unique. Definitely not for home use! If you stop and think about it$,$ it makes a lot of sense. Sof tware companies need to provide unique access codes because otherwise they wouldn't be in business tong. Eventually, they would not earn enough money to stay in business. Or to develop new software.

This e$-$mail is to inform you that we cannot provide extra licenses for Adobe Creative Cloud access due to the fact that we agreed to limit use to work$-$related projects only. Thank you for your cooperation.

Anna He Wong, Manager

Document Production