Chapter 7: Crafting Messages for Electronic Media

Rewrite an email message outlining a new employee procedure The following email message contains numerous errors related to what youve learned about planning and writing business messages. Using the information it contains, write a more effective version. (Also, correct the grammar based on the valuable knowledge youve gained from the circles Ive marked on your past homework.)

TO: Employees

FROM: Frank Nonymous

Subject: Too bad but we cant always have what we want the company has to work

I know that many of you dont like the break rules and some of you dont really care (and other people are pretty good), but there are rules for a reason. However, we determined that keeping track of employees while the took breaks at times they determined rather then when we determined the regular breaks was becoming a problem. This isnt working out very well. In fact, this is becoming a problem determined by the irregular break schedules, or non-schedules, that everyone was having. Being a nice boss, all of you need to determine what the right way to organize this is. The new rules are not going to be optional. If you do not follow the rules. you could be docked from your pay for hours when you turned up missing since your direct supervisor will not be able to determine if you are on break or not and will assume that you have walked away from youre job which will create a big problem for everyone because the schedules will have to be changed and people will not be very very happy. we cannot ever be at all responsible for errors that result rom your inattentiveness to all these new rules. I have already heard many many complaints from some of you and so I hope this email will end this issue once and for all because the decision ahs already been made and thats been determined as final. Starting on Monday, November 6, you are all immediately required take a regular at least 15 minute break in the morning and again in the afternoon and a regular thirty minute lunch at the times determined by your supervisor in advance NOT when you think you need a break or when you get around to it.

There will be no exceptions to this new rule!

Let me know if you want to discuss this. Let me know if you have questions.

Best wishes,

Fran Nonymous

Financial Manger

(333) 345-6789