Directions: Rewrite the following sentences for more effective business writing. Write positively, avoid bias-language, be concise, be specific, use active voice and the "you-view." 1. We will cancel your order if we don't receive the goods soon. 2. We will review your claim of defective products by an investigation of the problem! Answer: An investigation will be made towards your claim. 3. You failed to provide proof that the request was approved by the plant manager. 4. You are not eligible to participate in the profit-sharing plan until you have completed six full months of employment. 5. Performance appraisals will not be helpful if they were vague, unclear, and unencouraging. 6. We cannot give the discount rate on bills under $1,000. 7. The well-groomed inner-city children enjoyed their tour of our bakeries. 8. As a first-year employee, you are not eligible for vision insurance. 9. Company policy dictates that I cannot release that information on patients. 10. You did not send us your check. 11. A mentally retarded person was just hired as a mail clerk at our company. 12. Mr. Jones, Mr. Yacone, and Lisa will be members of the committee. 13. Check with the boy at the front desk for additional instructions. 14. Due to the fact that the progress report is due soon, we are unable to finish the preliminary assessments. 15. Your instructions contained misinformation; therefore, pursuant to your instructions, enclosed herewith are copies of the latest denied retirement report.