Hi.Read and go through the passage below carefully.Can you check if there is any errors in terms of grammatical error,sentence construction and structure,spelling.Give the correct ones and rectify my mistakes and any error in the passage. Then,can you rephrase some words in the passage to make it more sophisticated and bombastic.Thank you.

As mentioned above,I would like to express my intention that I want to apply to be converted to remisier.I have been working for almost 29 years with AmInvestment Bank and I think it is time for me to seeknew challenges to become a remisier.I have been thinking seriously and i have made the decision to convert to remisier.i just want to bring 20% of my total client only as long as i can be a remisier.Your approval is appreciated.