LA 321: Legal Writing Practical Skills assignment {Week Er} Reyise poorly worded sentences Below; are 20 sentences that are poorly worded. Use what you already know, what you read in your textbook this week, and what we discussed in lecture to reyise the sentences. Your goal should be to retain the substance of the sentence but to rewrite it in a more concise way. This exercise is an exercise in clarity and breyity. Em mole: Original sentence: Jose Iiyes in the city of Portland, which is in the state of Oregon. Reyision: Jose Iiyes in Portland, Oregon. If you don't see an issue with the original sentence, consider whether there are unnecessary words; whether words are repetitiye, or whether you can rephrase it so that it is easier to read. 1. Mary is a person who succeeds at eyerything she does, always. Reyision: 2. Over the last few days, she recently decided to visit her one and only mother in Chicago. Reyision: 3. He is taller in height than his sister is. Reyision: 4. The brief is due to the court bythe end of the month and so is the motion and the deadlines are firm because the judge doesn't like late submissions. Revision: 5. The car was green in color. Revision: 6. Each and every person should see that exhibit in their lives. Revision: I". Kathy wanted to attend Harvard University, which is the city of Cambridge, because of and owing to the fact that it is highly regarded reputation-wise. Revision: 3. In light of the email that you recently sent two days ago, I am replying today to respond by saying our client will not aocept your offer to settle. Revision: 9. Please kindly hear my request that you refrain from taking any and all further action in this matter. Revision: 10. Hopefully you can disregard and forget the unintentional and accidental oversight that was made last week when l was careless and forgot to turn in the file because I've submitted it now. Revision: 11. When are you free to talk, because I would like to discuss with you the matter of how our client would like to plea? 12. We need to update the discovery plan because the opposing counsel is not cooperating and they are stalling and it is causing us to go past the deadlines that were originally set. Revision: 13. The main issue here that is important for you to know is that the driver didn't look out their rea r-view mirror to see what was behind them before they pulled out of the driveway. Revision: 14. The holding of the case is consistent with the precedent set by many other prior cases on the same point of lainI that all agreed that symbolic expression counts as protected speech under the 1\" Amendment of the Constitution Rovislon: 15. Our client wants to settle with the plaintiff because, even though they don't think that they did anything wrong, the costs of defending the action are far more than what the plaintiff wants in a settlement sum. Rovision: 15. We need to communicate to the judge's clerlt that the proposed trial schedule is not going to work because there is an unavoidable oonflict that I can't get out of for one of these days. Revision: 1?. Due to the fact that it is past time for them to respond to our discovery requests, I am beginning to think that we should reach out to the judge to explain the situation. Revision: 13. In order to make sure that we aren't held liable, it is very important to remember that we need to keep up our end of the contract terms. Revision: 15. The clock starts to run an the duty to preserve evidence as seen as one party has info rmatien that leads them to reasonably believe that a lawsuit or litigation may be likely. Revision: 20. The chance of success for our client depends entirely on hevv the jury sees the facts and how they interpret the jury instructions that came from the judge. Revision