Module 5

Emails and Memos Activity 3 -

Opening Paragraphs

Instructions The following opening paragraphs to memos are wordy and indirect. After reading each paragraph, identify the main idea. Then, write an opening sentence that illustrates a more direct opening. 5 pts each.

1. Several staff members came to me and announced their interest in learning more about severance policies and separation benefits. As most of you know, these areas of concern are increasingly important for most Human Resources professionals. A seminar entitled Severance & Separation Benefits is being conducted November 11. I am allowing the following employees to attend the seminar: Jess Ramrez, Marisol Prez, and Tom Ross.

2. Your Intel Employees Association has secured for you discounts on auto repair, carpet purchases, travel arrangements, and many other services. These services are available to you if you have a Buying Power Card. All Intel employees are eligible for their own private Buying Power Cards.