Revision: The quadriplegic manager from Silicon Valley gave a wonderful presentation on customer service skills. Weakness: Revision: d Surely, even your staff must know that investing in the stock market is risky business; everyone knows that. Weakness: Revision: e Last week, Jeremy was crowned as the top sales rep for the month of January. Weakness: Revision: f The spin doctors had a vague response to the new health care law. Weakness: Revision: Our disabled third shift manager moves around the plant in a motorized wheelchair. Weakness: Revision: h Meanwhile, the Mexican supervisor is working on how to improve morale within the company. Weakness: Revision: i Brandon Smith was recognized for his efforts. Weakness: Revision: Because the lady is old, she will receive a discount on her car insurance. Weakness: j. Revision: READ ONLY - This is an older file forma... This activity focuses on Step 7 in Chapter 4 (Revise for style and tone) Review all sections in Step 7. Identify the specific weakness in each sentence below. Next, eliminate tone that will affect communication by revising the sentence. The revision should only be one sentence. The first sentence has been done for you. The weaknesses can be any one of those styles/tones above, as mentioned in Chapter 4. a Kayla is smart as a clam and should be promoted to office manager. Weakness: Eliminate the clich- smart as a clam Revision: Kayla is very intelligent and should be promoted to office manager. b Many reviews on the internet have included negative comments about Jennifer Hanson, a female pediatrician. Weakness: Revision: The quadriplegic manager from Silicon Valley gave a wonderful presentation on customer service skills. Weakness: Revision: d Surely, even your staff must know that investing in the stock market is risky business; everyone knows that. Weakness: Revision: e Last week, Jeremy was crowned as the top sales rep for the month of January. Weakness: Revision: f The spin doctors had a vague response to the new health care law. Weakness: Revision: 8 Our disabled third shift manager moves around the plant in a motorized wheelchair. Weakness: Revision: h Meanwhile, the Mexican supervisor is working on how to improve morale within the company. Weakness: Revision: Brandon Smith was recognized for his efforts. IL