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From: Gloria Clavel, Vice President

To: Tom Wilkins, Human Resources Manager

Subject: Soccer tickets

Tom,

Please let your staff members know that we have a number of free soccer tickets available for the match between H$$i Ph$$ng FC and T&T Hanoi this coming weekend. The tickets are for excellent seats near the field and include free parking in the stadium parking lot. Anyone who is interested in these tickets should contact me by e$-$mail or in person. Hit me up ASAP if you want in email or faceto$-$face, but do it by the end of tomorrow's grind, before the end of the workday tomorrow.. Serious business. Since the match this weekend is part of the tournament semi$-$finals, I am sure there will be a lot of interest in attending it$.$ Please advise your staff that tickets are up for grabs, but it's a race, folks $-$ first come, first served. And to keep it real, max two tickets per head. Don't be greedy, got it$?$ I will give out no more than two tickets per person.

Also, we may have tickets for another match, also part of the semifinals, next week, possibly Tuesday or Wednesday evening. I'll drop deets soon, I will let you know as soon as I find out, but in any case, that's a chance for people who want to see a match and can't get any of the tickets for this weekend. So be sure to let people know about this other possibility. Spread the word, peeps. Gotta keep everyone in the loop. Thanks for your assist on this.

Gloria