Weaknesses in the original message:

Excessive wordiness and repetition.

Lack of clarity in communicating the purpose of the message.

Inefficient organization of information.

Lack of concise instructions regarding the interviewing sessions.

Absence of a clear call to action for department heads.

Revised Message:

To: Department Heads

From: Christina Miranda cmiranda@cheyenne.com

Subject: Invitation: Intern Interview Sessions

Dear Department Heads,

I$\text{'}$m excited to announce that we will be offering internships in our company, starting with three positions in fields such as computer science and information systems. To ensure we select the best candidates, we have narrowed down to six excellent prospects from our nearby state university.

You are cordially invited to attend three interviewing sessions for these student candidates, which will be held on the following dates:

April $5,$ Conference Room, $2$ p$.$m$.$

April $7,$ Office $3,2$ p$.$m$.$

April $15,$ Conference Room, $2$ p$.$m$.$

Your presence and input are crucial in helping us make informed decisions. Please review the candidates' resumes on our company website and submit your ranking lists to me by March $25.$

Thank you for your cooperation and enthusiasm in welcoming new talent to our team.

Best regards,

Christina Miranda