Louise and Paul work for the same manufacturing company. Louise, a senior engineer, is chairing a committee to investigate ways to improve the hiring process at the company. Paul, a technical editor, also serves on the committee. The excerpts quoted in Louise’s email are from Paul’s email to all members of the committee in response to Louise’s request that members describe their approach to evaluating jobapplication materials. How would you revise Louise’s email to make it more effective?

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To: Paul From: Louise Sometimes I just have to wonder what you're thinking, Paul. >Of course, it's not possible to expect perfect resumes. But I >have to screen them, and last year I had to read over 200. I'm >not looking for perfection, but as soon as I spot an error I >make a mental note of it and, when I hit a second and >then a third error I can't really concentrate on the writer's >credentials. Listen, Paul, you might be a sharp editor, but the rest of us have a different responsibility: to make the products and move them out as soon as possible. We don't have the luxury of studying documents to see if we can find errors. I suggest you concentrate on what you were hired to do, without imposing your "standards" on the rest of us. >From my point of view, an error can include a >misused tradmark. Misusing a "tradmark," Paul? Is that Error Number 1?