4. Up-to-Date Words Revise these sentences so that they use less bureaucratic language and more up-to-date words.

Poor: Enclosed herewith are copies of our business plan and our loan agreement with the bank.

Improved: We have enclosed copies of our business plan and our loan agreement with the bank.

a. The office staff members have accepted longer workdays in lieu of a pay cut.

b. As per your instructions, I have forgone further efforts to secure payment from our erstwhile client.

c. Unless an affirmative response is received forthwith, the undersigned will cease all further negotiations and seek out alternative vendors who offer more favourable rate alternatives.

d. If you no longer reside in the vicinity of our business establishment, you may order via our website.

e. Your remuneration will be forthcoming on the first Friday of next month and, subsequently, on the third Friday of each month.

f. In order to achieve optimum results, it is advisable to prioritize your functional goals.

g. Let me reiterate. For optimum performance pertaining to the status of negotiations, we need to touch base prior to liaising with the bargaining committee.