Creating a Businesslike Tone, Read the following email draft and then

(a) analyze the strengths and weaknesses of each sentence and

(b) revise the document so that it follows this chapter’s guidelines.

The message was written by the marketing manager of an online retailer of baby-related products in the hope of becoming a retail outlet for Inglesina strollers and high chairs. As a manufacturer of stylish, top-quality products, Inglesina (based in Italy) is extremely selective about the retail outlets through which it allows its products to be sold.