Message Strategies: Persuasive Business Messages

[LO-3] Read the following message and

(a) analyze the strengths and weaknesses of each sentence and

(b) revise the document so that it follows this chapter’s guidelines.

Dear members of the school staff, I am writing to you with utter disappointment after having received numerous complaints from both students and their wards. It appears that many of you, despite being armed with a degree in education and trained in teaching methodologies, have failed to deliver your subject matter in a manner easily understood by students. It has been reported that many teachers have been reading out from textbooks without using any teaching aids to explain the finer nuances to students. As a result, students have failed to grasp the essence of these subjects and have resorted to learning by rote.
The management has noted the complaints against these teachers and expects each one to pay the utmost attention to a student’s learning abilities. Each of you is to send in a report about the changes you plan to bring about over the next month.