In the following, identify the sentence fault (fragment, run-on, comma splice). Then revise to remedy the fault.

1. Although they began as a side business for Disney. Destination weddings now represent a major income source.

2. About 2,000 weddings are held yearly. Which is twice the number just ten years ago?

3. Weddings may take place in less than one hour however the cost may be as much as $5,000.

4. Limousines line up outside Disney’s wedding pavilion, ceremonies are scheduled in two- hour intervals.

5. Many couples prefer a traditional wedding others request a fantasy experience.

For each of the following sentences, circle (a) or (b) Be prepared to justify your choice

6. Which is more emphatic?

a. We thought our written proposal was good.

b. We thought our written proposal was clear, efficient, and powerful.

7. Which is more emphatic?

a. The company spent a great deal on employee training.

b. The company spent $100,000 on remedial writing training for employees.

8. Which is more emphatic?

a. You had a call from Kaitlen Murphy who wants your Excel spreadsheet on the departmental budget.

b. You had a call from someone who wanted something.

9. Which de-emphasizes the refusal?

a. Although we need you here in the fall, we hope to be able to allow you to attend a conference in the spring.

b. You cannot attend the fall conference because you are needed here.

Revise the following sentences so that verbs are in the active voice. Put the emphasis on the doer of the action. Add subjects if necessary.

10. A company credit card was used by the manager to purchase office supplies.

11. To protect students, laws were passed in many states that prohibited the use of social security numbers as identification.

12. Checks are processed more quickly by banks because of new regulations.

13. Millions Of packages are scanned by FedEx every night as packages stream through its Memphis hub.

When indirectness or tact is required, use passive-voice verbs. Revise the following sentences so that they are in the passive voice.

Example Travis did not submit the proposal before the deadline.

Revision The proposal was not submitted before the deadline.

14. Accounting seems to have made a serious error in this report.

15. We cannot ship your order for smart surge protectors until May 5.

16. The government first issued a warning regarding the use of this pesticide more than 15 months ago.

17. Your insurance policy does not automatically cover damage to rental cars.

18. We cannot provide patient care unless patients show proof of insurance.

Revise the following sentences so that their parts are balanced.

19. (Hint: Match verbs.) To improve your listening skills, you should stop talking, your surroundings should be controlled, be listening for main points, and an open mind must be kept.

20. (Hint: Match active voice of verbs.) Paula Day, director of the Okefenokee branch, will now supervise all Eastern Division operations; the Western Division will be supervised by our Oroville branch director, Reggie Kostiz.

21. (Hint: Match verb phrases.) Our newly hired employee has started using the computer and to learn her coworkers’ names.

22. (Hint: Match adjectives.) Training seminars must be stimulating and a challenge.

23. Our new telecommunications software allows you to meet with customers over the Internet for training, Web-based meetings can be held, and other online collaboration within virtual teams is also facilitated.

24. We need more trained staff members, office space is limited, and the budget for overtime is much too small.

25. The application for a grant asks for this information: funds required for employee salaries, how much we expect to spend on equipment and what is the length of the project.

Revise to remedy dangling and misplaced modifiers.

26. By advertising extensively, all the open jobs were filled quickly.

27. To apply for early admission, applications must be submitted by October 1.

28. Identification passes must be worn at all times in offices and production facilities showing the employee’s picture.

29. The editor in chief’s rules were to be observed by all staff members, no matter how silly they seemed.

30. After being in the refrigerator for a week, Rachel said the salad tasted strange.