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The more Brook spoke the more perplexed the jury looked. Brook ended her opening comments by stating, "now, how do you know where this information came from on these loan applications? Because we have the mortgage brokers who handled the New York properties. Andrew Weiske handled the properties on 204-19, 3-25 and 11-11. He is from California, worked for a brokerage firm out there. But he handled those loan applications. And he will tell you that the information he got to put on those loan applications came from Jeremie Sheneman. He has never met him in person, communicated with him by phone and through faxes". That's yet another contradiction because the evidence proves that the loan broker, Weiske communicated with nana on the phone to do the applications and both he and nana testified that they were sent to her house to sign and send back.

I cringed as my "lawyer" stood up to talk. He haphazardly rambled, "my name is Bob Truitt, and it is my privilege and responsibility to represent Jeremie Sheneman. Jeremie, as you have been informed, is accused of developing a scheme to defraud banks. And, you know, we dispute that and deny that, but here's what happened.