Eliminate Sentence Errors that Impair Clarity and Unity 12. Eliminating Common Sentence Errors. Fix frag- d) To apply for this position, an updated resum ments, comma splices, and run-ons in the follow- and the names of three referees must be ing sentences. submitted. Sample: Our new line of high-resolution e) Outsourcing its printing jobs, substantial copiers is affordably priced it will amounts of money were saved by the company. be introduced in tho fall. f) Complaints from customers must be taken Revision: Our new line of high-resolution seriously by all sales associates, regardless of copiers is affordably priced. It will their triviality. be introduced in the fall 14. Eliminating Mixed Constructions, Faulty Predi- cation, and over-Coordination Correct the fol- a) All our branches have extended hours, some even offer weekend banking. lowing sentences. b) Before the Internet was developed and before Sample: One reason spam e-mail is un it began to have such an impact on market re- popular is because most people search. One of the most effective techniques find it time-wasting for building mailing lists was sweepstakes. Revision: One reason spam e-mail is unr c) The president and CEO embarked on a spend- popular is that most people find ing spree. Resulting in a higher debt load. it time-wasting 13. Correcting Misplaced and Dangling Modifiers. a) The purpose of the program was established to Correct dangling and misplaced modifiers in the reduce job dissatisfaction following sentences b) When the demand for industrial goods in- Sample: Hor co-worker told her on the first creased was an indication to expand our operation day no one eats in the cafeteria. c) We look forward to speaking with you and Revision: On the first day, her co-worker told you'll find additional information in the en- hor no one eats in the cafetoria. closed booklet. a) A shipment was forwarded from the ware- d) We're proud of our services and you should call house that cost more than $12,000. when you need help b) Mouse pads were given to conventioneers fea- e) The main reason that supervisors are con turing the company logo cerned that staff members consider the re- c) The computer was returned to the manufac quest to be an invasion of privacy. turer that was defective