I need feedback on the below statement:

Going through a Master of Science in Leadership got me deeply thinking about the importance of leadership in organizations. The initial idea for this project was born out of the need to first ensure good leadership foundations are installed before coming up with advanced leadership programs. Apparently, there are many organizations in which leadership is inexistent at worse and aggressive at best. In my opinion, however, having an aggressive leadership style is having no leadership at all.I am interested in conducting my project on the Intel Corporation, one which will lead to setting up appropriate foundations that will enable the implementation of professional development and mentorship programs. I feel that this project will be useful to the tech company in terms of changing the leadership styles from an aggressive to a more participatory one where employees feel part of the solution. This will improve employee commitment, morale, and hence productivity. It will enhance collaboration rather than promote competition between employees when tackling similar objectives for similar ends. Essentially, when people make decisions jointly there is a great commitment to one another and to the cause as well as a positive reaction to the decision itself.