Please rewrite this Memo and letter with thsi instructions.

Memo/Letter Make-Over Assignment

PURPOSE

This assignment will improve your composing and editing skills regarding crafting routine business documents. It will also sharpen your critical analysis abilities.

PROCEDURE

You will be given a document that is poorly written. It will be about three-fourths to a page.

Consider the documents purpose and audience. Analyze its strengths and weaknesses.

Rewrite the document, applying the principles of good business writing and document design that you are learning in this course.

On a separate sheet, explain your rationale for making the changes. Include your observations about the audience, stated (and underlying) purpose(s), relationship between reader(s) and writer, organizational setting, appropriate tone, level of formality, use of jargon, and any other reasons for the changes.

WHAT TO SUBMIT

Your revised typed memo or letter

Your written analysis and rationale for each document

Graded Memo Rewrite/Makeover

This assignment will be graded. Please rewrite using correct writing style, tone, grammar mechanics, etc. Include your analysis of the errors you found on a separate page.

Your staff does not like the idea of working at a distant campus on Thursdays, and you have to get them on board with this new mandated change. So, you wrote this Memo below:

To: All Staff

Subject: Thursday Work Days at Eldridge

Date: Februay 11,2015

From: Your name, Superviser

We have had lot of people not following directions about the work day on Thursdays. All staff is to be working on the Eldridge campus henceforth on Thursdays. You are to follow directions; disobeyance willnot be tolerated by anyone. Unless you have prior permission to be at another campus you are to be on this campus on Thursdays. The work hours are from 9am to 6pm with one hour for lunch. If you dont abide by these directives you will be written up by me. When you are there you should check for needed improvements or items or things missing to enhance this campus in addition to using his time for planning and doing your work task.

Bring your own latops as there is no extra computers at Elridge. The ones that are there are for that staff there.

Thanks and do adhere to these directives.

Sincerely

Your Name

Graded Letter Rewrite/Makeover

Please rewrite using correct writing style, tone, grammar mechanics, etc. Construct a letterhead. Include your analysis of the errors you found on a separate page.

You work for McDonough Company, 2550 Lockwood Plaza, Beechnut, OH 43443. As the SeniorManager, you ordered 14 new HP laptop computers for your senior staff. They were to arrive on Monday, January 19, 2015, but you have not received them. You called but were told the same thingthey are on their way. So you decided to write the letter below.

February 11, 2015

HP Company

1440 Jones Road

Houston, TX 77033

Dear Sir

I have called your office several times and got no satisfaction I sent you a check in the amount of

$16, 689.12 for 14 Hp Model 745 laptop computer. To date, I have not received them, and I am rather upset to say the least. The copy of my check is attached.

Your company has a good reputation but now I am questioning that reputation. Why tell me my computers are on the way with no date of arrival. Yet, when I contacted your Company about this order, P. O. No. 1276 I am told that they were shipped. Well if they were shipped then why have I not received them?

I want an explanation by phone; my number is 704.678.9112. I want an answer no later than February 16 or I will contact my lawyer. I have ordered from your company before and have been satisfied.

What do I have to do to get these laptops? Is it possible they were sent else where or were stolen?

This situation has been truly annoying for the staff expecting these laptops as well as for my business.

I want to here from you.

Regards

Your Name

Senior manager