• Using the Checklist for Style, revise the following text.
• Identify 2 or more style problems in the text and suggest ways to improve them to enhance the text readability
• (Hint: use the example on page 103 as a model for revision.)

Memo to employees

We are presently awaiting an on-site inspection of the designated professional library location by corporate representatives relative to electrical adaptations necessary for the computer installation. Meanwhile, all staff members are asked to respect the off-limits designation of the aforementioned location, as requested,due to the liability insurance provisions in regard to the computer.

103 The Importance of a Readable Style W: hile structure has to do with the reader's ability to understand the document as a Definition of style whole, including paragraphs, style has to do with readability at the sentence and word level. THE IMPORTANCE OF A READABLE STYLE No matter how technical your document, your audience won't understand the Style emphasizes content unless your sentences are easy to understand and your words are chosen the audience's needs precisely. Your style is a blend of these elements the way in which you construct each sentence What determines your style the length of your sentences the way in which you connect sentences the words and phrases you choose . the tone you convey Readable style, of course, also requires correct grammar, usage, mechanics, and style is more than spelling. But correctness alone is no guarantee of readability. For example, the correct grammar , following response to a job application follows the rules of grammar, usage and spelling mechanics, and spelling, but it is hard to read: We are in receipt of your recent correspondence indicating your Inefficient style interest in securing the advertised position. Your correspondence has been duly forwarded for consideration by the personnel office, which has employment candidate selection responsibility. You may expect to hear from us relative to your application as the selection process progresses. Your interest in the position is appreciated. Notice as a reader how hard you have to work to extract information from the pre- vious paragraph. This information could be expressed clearly and concisely, as in the following paragraph: Your application for the advertised position has been forwarded to our Readable style personnel office. As the selection process moves forward, we will be in touch. Thank you for your interest. Inefficient style makes readers work harder than they should. Style can be ineffi- cient for many reasons but especially when it does the following makes the writing impossible to interpret takes too long to make the point Ways in which style goes wrong 103 The Importance of a Readable Style W: hile structure has to do with the reader's ability to understand the document as a Definition of style whole, including paragraphs, style has to do with readability at the sentence and word level. THE IMPORTANCE OF A READABLE STYLE No matter how technical your document, your audience won't understand the Style emphasizes content unless your sentences are easy to understand and your words are chosen the audience's needs precisely. Your style is a blend of these elements the way in which you construct each sentence What determines your style the length of your sentences the way in which you connect sentences the words and phrases you choose . the tone you convey Readable style, of course, also requires correct grammar, usage, mechanics, and style is more than spelling. But correctness alone is no guarantee of readability. For example, the correct grammar , following response to a job application follows the rules of grammar, usage and spelling mechanics, and spelling, but it is hard to read: We are in receipt of your recent correspondence indicating your Inefficient style interest in securing the advertised position. Your correspondence has been duly forwarded for consideration by the personnel office, which has employment candidate selection responsibility. You may expect to hear from us relative to your application as the selection process progresses. Your interest in the position is appreciated. Notice as a reader how hard you have to work to extract information from the pre- vious paragraph. This information could be expressed clearly and concisely, as in the following paragraph: Your application for the advertised position has been forwarded to our Readable style personnel office. As the selection process moves forward, we will be in touch. Thank you for your interest. Inefficient style makes readers work harder than they should. Style can be ineffi- cient for many reasons but especially when it does the following makes the writing impossible to interpret takes too long to make the point Ways in which style goes wrong