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June 4, 200x

  

Mr. Allen C. Fineberg

  

3250 Ponciana Way

  

Palm Beach Gardens, FL 33410

  

Dear Mr. Fineburg:

  

You probably choose Body Fitness because it has became one of the top-rated gyms in the Palm Beach area. Making your work out enjoyable has always been our principal goal. To continue to provide you with the best equipment and programs, your feedback is needed by my partner and myself.

  

We have build an outstanding program with quality equipment, excellent training programs, and our support staff is very helpful. We feel, however, that we could have a more positive affect and give more individual attention if we could extend our peak usage time. You have probable noticed that attendance at the gym raises from 4 p.m. to 8 p.m. We wish it was possible to accommodate all our customers on their favorite equipment during those hours. Although we can’t stretch an hour. We would like to make better use of the time between 8 p.m. and 1 1 p.m. With more members’ coming later, we would have less crush from 4 to 8 p.m. Our exercise machines and strength-training equipment is lying idle later in the evening.

  

To encourage you to stay later, security cameras for our parking area are being considered by us. Cameras for some inside facilitys may also be added. We have gave this matter a great deal of thought. Although Body Fitness have never had an incident that endangered a member. We have went to considerable trouble to learn about security cameras. Because we think that you will feel more comfortable with them in action.

  

Please tell us what you think, fill out the enclosed questionnaire, and drop ¡t the ballot box during your next visit at the desk. We are asking for your feed back about scheduling your workouts, selecting your equipment, and ¡f you would consider coming later in the evening. If you have any other suggestions for reducing the crush at peak times. Please tell us on the enclosed form. .

  

Cordially,

  

Nicolas Barajas, Manager

  

Enclosure
 

Body Fitness Training Massage Wellness 3392 Econlockhatchee Trail Orlando, FL 32822 (407) 551-8791