Editing Exercises

Activity #1

Using what you know about the construction of a perfect paragraph, create one perfect paragraph using this copy below.

Frostbite and Hypothermia

Frostbite and hypothermia are serious conditions, so listen to the local forecast and wear appropriate clothing to reduce your risk. Dress in layers of warm clothing so the air trapped between the layers will act as insullation. To prevent the body from losing heat, wear a hat. If possible, wear mittens instead of gloves. Eat well because the body turns food into heat, but dont drink alcohol (it makes the body lose heat faster). By following these common sense precautions, you can avoid cold weather hazards.

When exposed to cold temperatures, a persons body tissues begin to freeze. This condition, called frostbite, is divided into three categories based on severity. continued exposure will lead to the second degree, also called superficial frostbite. When this happens, the outer layer of skin will feel hard and frozen and blistering of the skin is likely. Deep frostbite (third degree) causes skin to become blotchy and blue and the skin and underlying tissues are hard and very cold and the skin will blister. Frostbite is a serious medical condition and attention is necessary; however if you must wait for help, slowly warm affected areas. Do not rub frostbitten areasit will cause further tissue damage. Warm affected areas by tucking hands and feet next to warm skin or by immersion in warm water; f you also note symptoms of hypothermia, warm the body core before the extremities.

Hypothermia occurs when: the core body temperature drops below 98.6 de-grees Fahrenheit. Some common warning signs are uncontrollable shivering, disorientation, incoherent or slurred speech and cold pale skin. If the condition goes untreated, drowsiness, extreme confusion and slowed breathing will occur. Cold-related problems can be even worse when the wind blows. As wind speed increases, heat is carried away frrom the body at an accelerated rate, driving down the body temperature. Wind chill is the term used to describe and quantify the rate of heat loss from exposed skin. It combines the effects of wind and cold temperatures with all that it does also.

When the bodys core temperature drops below 95 degrees, shivering may stop, but he or she is suffering from hypothermia and may lose consciousness or even die. Seek medical care immediately!!!!

Although hypothermia is more common recognized as an outdoor (or outstand the house) hazard, it can occur indoors as well. Elderly or infirm persons are at risk even indoors and should take precautions to keep thermostats above 65 degrees and dress warmly. Symptoms of the first degree (called frostnip) cause a loss of feeling and a white or pale appearance in fingers, toes, ear lobes and the tip of the nose.

Activity #2

Correct the common errors:

Harriet Tubman was born in to slavery. In 1849, she excaped from a Maryland plantation. She would devote the rest of her life to helping other slaves gain there freedom. She was a leader of the Underground Railroad, a network of secret places ware slaves could stay on their way to the North. During the civil War, she serve as a cook a nurse, and a union spy. Tubman dyed in March 1913. Her tombstone reads, Servant of God, Well Done.

Activity #3

Correct the common errors:

People around the world celebrate Pi Day on march 14. We use the greek letter (called pi) to represent the number we get when we divide the circumference of a circle by its diamiter. Because it is a Mathematical constant, the value of pi never changes That value rounds to 3.14, and the digits after the decimal point continues infinitly without repeating in any pattern. The best calculations of pi can be trillions of digit long! Will your math class do special activitys on Pi Day?