EXERCISE 4C Each of these sentences contains a series in which the parallelism has gone awry. If you hear the problem immediately, revise the sentence. If you don't hear the problem right away, first identify the units in the series and test for parallel structure; then you'll be prepared to revise. Example He will probably be admitted to Officer Candidate School because he is young, strong, he can work hard, and has a good education. The series is mixed, with two adjectives, then a clause, then a verb phrase. Suggested Revisions He will probably be admitted to Officer Candidate School because he is young, strong, hardworking, and well educated. Four adjectives fit into the slot after "he is." He will probably be admitted to Officer Candidate School because he is young and strong, he can work hard, and he has a good education. Three clauses fit into the slot after "because." 1. He was always looking for money - scamming, betting, shooting pool, even now and then a job. 2. My mother out of grief became strict with my father, my older sister, and hard on me. 3. Corwin took up the instrument, threw back his hair, and then a swift, silent passage of music. 4. Ashley finished her story, went around the room, asked everyone why they were supporting the campaign, and she listened to their stories. 5. The old man was not there because of health care or the economy or education or the war or it could have been any other issue. EXERCISE 4C that one moment of recognition is not enough to give health care to the sick, or jobs to the jobless, or improve education. 7. The function of a university is to develop the analytical skills of students and a place where they should learn to express themselves. 8. He argued for financial aid for the children of immigrants in order to ensure the equal right to study the liberal arts, an equal chance at higher-paying jobs, and to learn the communication skills that prepare young adults for full participation in a democracy.