I need a 3 part thesis and avoid slang like "vibes." Can someone help me with the three-part thesis? My first paragraph is below.

Krebs experiences a particular absence of desire and inspiration, rather busying himself with watching the young ladies in his town stroll by his home, resting, perusing, rehearsing the clarinet, and eating. Through Krebs, Hemingway paints an image of the manner in which many fighters battle to conform to home subsequent to encountering war. The military had instructed him that he did not require a young lady, despite the fact that numerous men guaranteed that they couldn't live without one. Krebs enjoys the vibes of the young ladies, however, does not have any desire to talk to them. That was something great about the young French and German ladies, not a lot of talking.