Is my writing for this email, correct? I mean academy and grammar. (you can edit and add any sentence). ( I want you to reformulate it in a better way).

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Hi all,

I hope this email finds you well.

I am Ali Mosa (Student ID: 000000). I applied for access request pariser's building. The latest update about this I got from Mr. John was in14 Apr 2021 indicates that it is being worked on.

I would like to check in with you regarding status of my access. In addition to my inquire about the procedures to complete the office access request.

Yours Sincerely,

Ali