MGMT 102 - Business Communications Business Writing Analysis Spring 2016 IMPORTANT INSTRUCTIONS 1. To do well on this assignment, make sure that you understand the principles and techniques from pages 30-40 of the Resource Book \"A Call to Action for Business Writing\" and \"Say It Straight.\" 2. Submit this assignment through SacCT by 11:59 pm on March 3. 3. When you are ready to submit your answers, go to Assessments Business Writing Analysis 4. Click SAVE AND SUBMIT only when you are ready to submit the assignment to the instructor. Directions: Study the e-mail message below, analyzing the business style. (The subject line and first sentence are effective as written.) Select the most appropriate answer for each question. Questions 1 - 3 are worth 4 points each. Questions 4 - 9 are worth 3 points each. From: Beth Harmon, Director of Human Resources Sent: Monday, January 4, 2016 To: All Employees Subject: Bonus Vacation Day in 2016 for Every Employee (1) BusComm employees will receive an \"appreciation\" vacation day in 2016. (2) We want to recognize the best team of employees in the company's past history. (3) Specifically, your leaders are commemorating your extra effort to achieve the highest sales numbers ever. (4) Therefore, you will definitely enjoy your bonus day. (5) You may use your extra vacation day during most months this year, with the approval of your supervisor. (6) However, you may not take your bonus day during October because of our holiday production schedule. (7) We have attached a copy of our vacation request form. (8) It must be submitted at least one month before your requested date. (9) Also, it is important to write \"bonus day\" in the \"reason\" box. (10) We thank you in advance for your continued hard work. 1. Which sentence uses an expletive? Rewrite the sentence effectively. 2. Which sentence uses passive voice? Rewrite the sentence effectively. 3. What is the style problem in Sentence 6? Rewrite the sentence effectively. 4. Which sentence contains a pair of words that are redundant? a. b. c. d. 5. Which sentence uses a concrete noun as its simple subject? a. b. c. d. 6. Sentence 6 Sentence 7 Sentence 8 (none of the above) The message above a. b. c. d. 8. Sentence 2 Sentence 3 Sentence 10 (none of the above) Which sentence uses formal wording? a. b. c. d. 7. Sentence 2 Sentence 3 Sentence 9 (none of the above) uses simple sentences. uses compound sentences. uses complex sentences. (both a and c above) Which of the following would be an effective substitute for Sentence 4? a. b. c. d. Therefore, you will enjoy your bonus vacation day. Therefore, we are sure that you will enjoy your bonus vacation day. Therefore, we hope that you enjoy your bonus vacation day. (none of the above) 9. Which of the following would be an effective substitute for Sentence 10? a. b. c. d. The company thanks you in advance for your continued hard work. Thanking you in advance for your continued hard work. Thank you in advance for your continued hard work. (none of the above)