Revise the paragraph below for concision and readability. Follow these principles in your revision: Eliminate or condense empty phrases. Avoid cliches. Replace with regular language. Avoid slang. Use jargon only when appropriate. Eliminate redundancy and unnecessary repetition by cutting words or combining sentences. At this point in time, my reason for taking this Shakespeare course is complicated. The first reason why is due to the fact that I wish to transfer from the community college system to a baccalaureate degree granting system. When entering the college as a junior, first and foremost, the college system expects me to have completed my general education coursework. Therefore, an expectation of mine for this class involves enhancing my chances of being accepted for admission to a four-year college or university by completing all my general education courses. The second purpose for my taking the class is for my own personal enrichment. In this day and age, it does not hurt having a well-rounded education, and I have always really been into Shakespeare. As a matter of fact, the reason why I have fond past memories of reading his sonnets in high school is because I have had great teachers at My plans for the future might include majoring in liberal studies or even English, and a college requirement requires students to take a course in literature. So, my anticipation is that I will enjoy this class, and I anticipate that it will help improve my chances of getting into an institution of higher learning that is not a community college. Last but not least, I hope to pass with flying colors (225 word. Please revise in only one paragraph. Thanks in advance