Using the Checklist for Style, revise the following selections.

(l li11t: use the brief example on page 210 as a model for revision.)

a. Letter to a local newspaper.

In the absence of defi nitive studies regardjng the optimum length of the school day, I can only state my personal opinion based upon observations made by me and upon teacher observations that have been conveyed to me. Considering the length of the present school day, it is my opinion that the day is excessive length-wise for most elementary pupils, certainly for almost all of the primary children.

To find the answer to the problem requires consideration of two ways in which the problem may be viewed. One way focuses upon the needs of the children, while the other focuses upon logistics, transportation, scheduling, and other limits imposed by the educational system.

If it is necessary to prioritize these two ideas, it would seem most reasonable to give the fi rst consideration to the primary reason for the very existence of the system, i.e., to meet the educational needs of the children the system is trying to serve.