One effective way to improve your writing skills is to critique and edit the resume of someone else.

Your Task. 

Analyze the following poorly organized resume. Discuss its weaknesses. Your instructor may ask you to revise sections of this resume before showing you an improved version.

Resume of Brenda Ann Trudell

5349 West Plaza Place

Tulsa, OK 74115-3394

Home: 834-4583 Cell: 594-2985

E-mail: supahsnugglykitty@aol.com

OBJECTIVE:

I would like to find an entry-level position with a large corporation that offers opportunity for advancement

SKILLS: Word processing, spreadsheet, QuickBooks, Internet, Excel, Powerpoint, Excel, database.

EDUCATION

Langston University, Tulsa, Oklahoma. Now working on BBA. Major: Accounting. My GPA in major is 3.5. Expected degree date: June 2009. Very interested in forensic accounting. Took courses in: Analysis and Application of Accounting Data and Financial Reporting.

EXPERIENCE

Assistant bookkeeper, 2007 to present. Marsh and McLennan, Inc., Tulsa. I work with many small businesses to keep their bookkeeping records. I have to be accurate, and I get little supervision. I prepare income tax returns, I monitor and update A/R records for Overland Truck Lines. I am responsible for the payroll records at three firms. The owner of Marsh and McLennan said I was reliable and painstaking.

Peterson Controls Inc., Tulsa. I held a data processing internship from July to October 2006. I worked with spreadsheets and also kept information for production uptime and downtime. Prepared graphs, answered phones; helped people with collecting and photocopying their data.

2005–2008. Langston University, Tulsa. I was coordinator of Volunteer Income Tax Assistance Project. I marketed the VITA program to Langston students. I scheduled volunteers, got the supplies, and kept track of all appointments.

Community Service: March of Dimes Drive at Central Park High School; All Souls Unitarian Church, assistant director of Children’s Choir.