Revising for Clarity and Conciseness [LO-4] The following sentence appears in your first draft of a report that analyzes perceived shortcomings in your company’s employee health benefits:

Among the many criticisms and concerns expressed by the workforce, at least among the 376 who responded to our online survey (out of 655 active employees), the issues of elder care, health insurance during retirement, and the increased amount that employees are being forced to pay every month as the company’s contribution to health insurance coverage has declined over the past two years were identified as the most important.

Revise this 69-word sentence to make it shorter, more direct, and more powerful.