Concision Exercise

Read chapter $11$ in your textbook on editing writing for technical communication.

For each of the three passages below, edit the prose to become more effective technical communication, using the strategies discussed in the textbook and in our class meeting. It should be possible to reduce each passage to just one sentence, but in any event, your revision of the passage should not exceed two grammatical sentences.

When you complete the assignment, please leave in the original passage, simply type your revised passage underneath each original selection.

In an attempt to draw in customers, Target advertises their low prices and great deals in print and virtual media, including the Sunday paper, where they offer coupons and other promotions. Target offers a variety of inexpensive house brands, including pet food, personal care items, toys, and clothing. Target also has its own popular line of groceries, Good & Gather:

It is important that students are in attendance at class meetings regularly and that professors are asked questions whenever there is confusion. Planners should be used and dates of exams and assignments should be recorded. A student should always pay attention and take careful and detailed notes when they are in class.

We want to develop a marketing strategy for the company and in order for it to succeed, we should create categories according to the company's services. We plan to divide the company first into the Residential service department of Magnolia Lawn and Landscaping. Second, there will be the Commercial service department. Then, third, there will be the Design department.