16. Revise your email to sales associates at Herman Miller.

Revise your draft email to Herman Miller sales associates (from Exercise 11). What changes will you make to improve the message? Follow these steps for the revision process:

a. Read the email once, revising for content. Make sure that all needed information is included, no unnecessary information is included, and the information is presented in a logical sequence.

b. Read the email a second time, revising for style. Make sure that the words, sentences, paragraphs, and overall tone are appropriate.

c. Read the email a third time, revising for correctness. Make sure that grammar, mechanics, punctuation, and word choice are error free.